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Playing With Words – Assonance

I am on the email list of Grammarbook.com, so I get their periodic emails. This is a topic I had never heard of but enjoyed. A new trick up a writer’s sleeve.

Can’t have too many of those 😉

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Language provides more than the means to express and deliver ideas and information. It also bears the power to please us through the tools we use to shape it.

Thoughtful, eloquent communication can satisfy the outer and inner ear as much as awaken the mind. One technique that attracts us to writing and speech is assonance, the repetition of vowel sounds within two or more words with different consonants.

Read the following phrases aloud to yourself:

Examples

the bony hand holding the holy book

the place you set the bookcase

the running crackle of thunder


Did you notice the matching vowel sounds that stood out?

the bony hand holding the holy book

the place you set the bookcase

the running crackle of thunder


You also may have noticed that assonance can apply to words that rhyme as well as to those that don’t: place, bookcasebonyholdingholyrunningthunder

Assonance: Why We Use It

We apply assonance to add rhythm, style, and voice to our writing. We’ll often find it in songs, prose, movies, and poems because of how it emphasizes sounds in memorable ways.

Examples

“Rock Around the Clock” (song by Bill Haley & His Comets)
“You can go youown way” (lyric from song by Fleetwood Mac)
“Sweet dreams are made of this” (lyric from song by the Eurythmics)

“Hear the mellow wedding bells / Golden bells! / What a world of happiness their harmony foretells!” (from the poem “Bells” by Edgar Allen Poe)

“I feel the need, the need for speed” (popular line from the movie “Top Gun”)

“So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past” (from “The Great Gatsby” by F. Scott Fitzgerald)

Consider also the memorable mood achieved by a common saying such as “the squeaky wheel gets the grease” or the impact of a phrase such as “the age of rage.”


Assonance: Useful Guidelines

The following principles will help reinforce your skill with assonance in your writing.

1) Remember that assonance is the repetition of vowel sounds in two or more words. The sounds do not apply to letters used.

Examples

antique amplifier

merry Mary

white knight


2) The repeating sounds can appear anywhere in the word (start, middle, or end; stressed or unstressed syllable). The words also do not need to be next to one another.

Examples

The antique amplifier is aantidote to the garish new one you bought.

Merry Mary loves picking berries and cherrieeverywhere.

The white knight is wearing titanium armor.


3) Assonance can at times be alliteration as well.

Examples

antique amplifier (The “a” sounds are vowels as well as stressed syllables.)

Let’s pack before the mosquitoes attack. (Again the “a” sounds are both vowels and stressed syllables.)


4) In business writing and personal correspondence, assonance can give our communication expressive distinction.

The lessons gained from the quarter’s earnings leave us wisely advised.

To this day, the flame of those memories remains the same.


Assonance: What It’s Not

As precise and eloquent communicators, we want to understand both what assonance is and what it is not.

We’ll often see assonance in rhymes with identical sounds at the end of lines and words:

“Yesterday / all my troubles seemed so far away (from song by the Beatles)


We’ll also often see rhymes that include a vowel sound but end in a consonant sound:

“Jack be nimble, Jack be quick;
Jack jump over the candlestick
 (from the nursery rhyme; includes vowel sound “i” but concludes in “ck” sound)


In Jack’s case, we have an example of a consonant rhyme (matching consonant sounds). To be an assonant rhyme, it must end in matching vowel sounds:

“Jack be nimble, Jack be spry;
Jack jump over the pumpkin pie


We’ve mentioned that assonance can be alliterative as well (antique amplifier). However, if we said “let’s go before the mosquitoes attack,” we would not have both assonance and alliteration because the “o” sounds in “go” and “mosquitoes” are not all stressed syllables.

Simply remember that with alliteration, the repeating vowel sound must be on the first or stressed syllable; with assonance, the repeating sounds can appear anywhere.

Assonance: Vital Restraint

For writing that reaches others with impact and clarity, we will aim to use assonance with proper moderation. Applied with the right touch and rarity, it can grip attention and linger; used with indulgence, it can distract and even seem pretentious or showy.

Consider the following sentence:

If I may say, you whiled away the day waiting for your time in the sun’s rays to pay.


The sentence may have rhythm and movement with its one- and two-syllable assonance, but it also becomes thickening sonic syrup. Its liberal use of assonance would likely attract undesired attention to style unless within a book for young readers.

We can restore appealing assonance with some touch-up:

If I may say, you wasted the day trying to get a sun tan.


Beyond using assonance with greater subtlety, our revision states the same thought more concisely.

On Writing

Oh, the humanity: Am I the only writer who fears he’s lost the magic every time he sits down at a keyboard? Ah, but then what made me think I had any magic to begin with? Writers wear two colognes, “l’insecurite” and “l’arrogance,” and never have to purchase either one–they’re pheromones. “Writers rush in where […]

via Finding a Publisher — Mitch Teemley

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“Pretty” Words – a list

I’m not sure who amassed this large alphabetical list of interesting words (I couldn’t find a citation on the post) but as writers, I thought you’d like to see the list. I’m always looking for interesting words. But be careful – don’t use too many in one piece. Everything in moderation, people. 🙂

Source: Sesquipedaedalus: Prettiest Words: A Work in Progress

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What do Writer’s Read?

elfIf you’re a writer, I hope you’re also a reader. I know I am. And I’m not just talking about reading books in the genre that you write it. I also mean books about improving your craft.

I’ve been doing this a while now, so I’ve been to writing workshops or weekend writer events and I’ve gotten lots of suggestions about what to read. I’ve shared some of these books with you in the past: The Writer’s Journey, Techniques of the Selling Writer, Take Your Character to Lunch, Writing Dialogue, Eats, Shoots and Leaves, Woe is I are all some of my favorites.  Story by Robert McKee is good if you feel like picking apart you story, but as a book, it’s a bit hard to read. And I continue to write down titles of books I want to take a look at.

Alinka, in this post (The 10 books every successful author needs to read) mentions the book On Writing by Stephen King which I also read. It’s an interesting book, if you want to learn a bit (and just a bit) about how Stephen writes, but it’s more about him and his writing philosophy. She also mentions Bird by Bird, which I also read, but didn’t get a lot from it. It’s a book that is a bit hard to describe. The author talks about writing and hanging in there with your writing but that’s about all I remember. Some people really like that book, though, so don’t just go off of my opinion.

And speaking of reading, I have a few ebooks on sale for the holidays, including my latest historical fiction on the creation and creators of Nancy Drew: Will the Real Carolyn Keene Please Stand up – Just .99!

So Happy Holidays! And Happy Reading!

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Do you hate E. L. James ? #fiftyshades

Kudos, Damyanti, for sticking up for common decency. If James’ writing is bad, then don’t buy her book or read her book. None of this shameless, personless online degrading. We aren’t in 5th grade people. Lets discuss poor writing in a better forum than in a bully tweet.
Christine
p.s. I did not read or purchase her book for two reasons – not my kind of reading and I also heard the writing was poor. There are so many good books out there to read to waste time on poorly written one. And honestly, her editor and publisher need to be discussed as much as James. They printed the books, after all.

Ten words to cut from your writing – The Globe and Mail

taken from npr.org

taken from npr.org

A good reminder to pick your words carefully and thoughtfully. I would also add “that” and “had” to the list. It doesn’t mean you can’t use certain words, but know why you are using them or why your writing might be stronger and clearer if you left them out. Thanks for the reminder Shanna.

Ten words to cut from your writing – The Globe and Mail.

7 Writing Lessons from Gabriel Garcia Marquez

Some ideas about writing from Joe Bunting and Gabriel Garcia Marquez.

I don’t think you have to be a journalist to write well, but I do agree with the idea of keeping it “real.” Fiction mixed with real life is always more believable. I have not read Marquez myself but I put him on my to read list. I like magic. I’ll blog a review when I get around to reading his book(s).

7 Writing Lessons from Gabriel Garcia Marquez.

What is the Oxford Comma?

A bit of punctuation trivia for you writers out there.

Also – the Oxford (or serial) comma is taken from The Chicago Manual of Style, a style guide that fiction writers generally use for their writing vs the AP Style Guide, which is used for newspapers and web content.

What is the Oxford Comma?.

Secrets of working with an Editor

I’ve never seen information presented in a slide show. It was kind of nice to view it that way, interesting, different.

As an editor, Mark’s style guide idea is a good one, but I don’t think I’d need all the information he asks for. I do like knowing what writing rules the writer has broken so I don’t waste time correcting something the writer wanted there in the first place. I don’t know how many people told me to change cliches in my book Rosebloom. I like cliches, sometime, and I left them in there on purpose.
What he didn’t mention was telling the editor the intended audience for the book. The language and references can be quite different for a piece depending on the audience.
Thanks Mark!

1984 in 1949

Example of a good opening line: “It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen.”

1984

On this day in 1949 the book, 1984 by Eric Arthur Blair, AKA George Orwell, was published. Orwell wrote the book while on an island in the Scottish Hebrides. He wanted to get way after his wife’s death and his success with Animal Farm. He had TB but continued to write, despite his illness (he also remarried – the marriage taking place in the hospital in October of 1949). Born June 23, 1903 in India. His mother moved the family to England when he was one. He died January 21, 1950 at the age of 49 in London.  orwell

Some of his other books are: The Clergyman’s Daughter, Burmese Days, Coming Up For Air, Down and Out in Paris and London, Keep the Aspidistra Flying (I have to look at this one just because of the title – What’s an aspidistra?!)