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Playing With Words – Assonance

I am on the email list of Grammarbook.com, so I get their periodic emails. This is a topic I had never heard of but enjoyed. A new trick up a writer’s sleeve.

Can’t have too many of those 😉

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Language provides more than the means to express and deliver ideas and information. It also bears the power to please us through the tools we use to shape it.

Thoughtful, eloquent communication can satisfy the outer and inner ear as much as awaken the mind. One technique that attracts us to writing and speech is assonance, the repetition of vowel sounds within two or more words with different consonants.

Read the following phrases aloud to yourself:

Examples

the bony hand holding the holy book

the place you set the bookcase

the running crackle of thunder


Did you notice the matching vowel sounds that stood out?

the bony hand holding the holy book

the place you set the bookcase

the running crackle of thunder


You also may have noticed that assonance can apply to words that rhyme as well as to those that don’t: place, bookcasebonyholdingholyrunningthunder

Assonance: Why We Use It

We apply assonance to add rhythm, style, and voice to our writing. We’ll often find it in songs, prose, movies, and poems because of how it emphasizes sounds in memorable ways.

Examples

“Rock Around the Clock” (song by Bill Haley & His Comets)
“You can go youown way” (lyric from song by Fleetwood Mac)
“Sweet dreams are made of this” (lyric from song by the Eurythmics)

“Hear the mellow wedding bells / Golden bells! / What a world of happiness their harmony foretells!” (from the poem “Bells” by Edgar Allen Poe)

“I feel the need, the need for speed” (popular line from the movie “Top Gun”)

“So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past” (from “The Great Gatsby” by F. Scott Fitzgerald)

Consider also the memorable mood achieved by a common saying such as “the squeaky wheel gets the grease” or the impact of a phrase such as “the age of rage.”


Assonance: Useful Guidelines

The following principles will help reinforce your skill with assonance in your writing.

1) Remember that assonance is the repetition of vowel sounds in two or more words. The sounds do not apply to letters used.

Examples

antique amplifier

merry Mary

white knight


2) The repeating sounds can appear anywhere in the word (start, middle, or end; stressed or unstressed syllable). The words also do not need to be next to one another.

Examples

The antique amplifier is aantidote to the garish new one you bought.

Merry Mary loves picking berries and cherrieeverywhere.

The white knight is wearing titanium armor.


3) Assonance can at times be alliteration as well.

Examples

antique amplifier (The “a” sounds are vowels as well as stressed syllables.)

Let’s pack before the mosquitoes attack. (Again the “a” sounds are both vowels and stressed syllables.)


4) In business writing and personal correspondence, assonance can give our communication expressive distinction.

The lessons gained from the quarter’s earnings leave us wisely advised.

To this day, the flame of those memories remains the same.


Assonance: What It’s Not

As precise and eloquent communicators, we want to understand both what assonance is and what it is not.

We’ll often see assonance in rhymes with identical sounds at the end of lines and words:

“Yesterday / all my troubles seemed so far away (from song by the Beatles)


We’ll also often see rhymes that include a vowel sound but end in a consonant sound:

“Jack be nimble, Jack be quick;
Jack jump over the candlestick
 (from the nursery rhyme; includes vowel sound “i” but concludes in “ck” sound)


In Jack’s case, we have an example of a consonant rhyme (matching consonant sounds). To be an assonant rhyme, it must end in matching vowel sounds:

“Jack be nimble, Jack be spry;
Jack jump over the pumpkin pie


We’ve mentioned that assonance can be alliterative as well (antique amplifier). However, if we said “let’s go before the mosquitoes attack,” we would not have both assonance and alliteration because the “o” sounds in “go” and “mosquitoes” are not all stressed syllables.

Simply remember that with alliteration, the repeating vowel sound must be on the first or stressed syllable; with assonance, the repeating sounds can appear anywhere.

Assonance: Vital Restraint

For writing that reaches others with impact and clarity, we will aim to use assonance with proper moderation. Applied with the right touch and rarity, it can grip attention and linger; used with indulgence, it can distract and even seem pretentious or showy.

Consider the following sentence:

If I may say, you whiled away the day waiting for your time in the sun’s rays to pay.


The sentence may have rhythm and movement with its one- and two-syllable assonance, but it also becomes thickening sonic syrup. Its liberal use of assonance would likely attract undesired attention to style unless within a book for young readers.

We can restore appealing assonance with some touch-up:

If I may say, you wasted the day trying to get a sun tan.


Beyond using assonance with greater subtlety, our revision states the same thought more concisely.

Keep the Writing Flowing

Donna Hockey has some good points when it comes to how to keep the writing going. I would add another that she somewhat implied in her title – writing scene to scene.

The is much written out there about writing the beginning of your story: It has to set the scene – introduce the time, the characters, the surroundings; to name just a few, it has to post a question(s) for the reader – a question so good the reader is “hooked” and wants to come back time and time again to find out the answer .question

And the end, well, the end sometimes just writes itself, or it’s something easier to figure out than the middle. You don’t hear much about how to write all the stuff in the middle. Yes, there has to be conflict and stumbling blocks for your protagonist to overcome, but what does that mean, exactly!

What I recommend to writers is the write scene by scene. You can make up an outline of the whole story, if you like, if that makes your thoughts flow better, makes you feel more organized, but don’t be surprised if your characters take your story in another directions. Then set the outline aside and start writing. Take the beginning of your story and decide (after the first upset) what your character is going to do next. Just pick something.arrows If you don’t like the direction you character chooses, then cut it later, but for now, just pick something for your character to do, put them in the next place (Alaska, California, their neighborhood park…), with the next set of characters (a flight attendant, a lifeguard, a homeless person…), in the next set of circumstances (trying to escape what just happened to them, trying to find a missing relative, encountering someone who helps push them on one direction or another…). At the end of this scene, something has to have changed, or something has to have happened. It has to propel the character(s) forward in some – maybe small – way, or at minimal is a set-up for something that will happen in the future.

I think the middle is best written this way, scene by scene. I don’t think it feels so daunting this way and if you do as Donna suggests (a very good idea, if it works) and you leave your days writing at a place where you know the character will be next, that will jump start you into your next scene when you again sit down and put pen to paper or finger to keys – whatever your form of poison may be.

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